Foundation

Alright, here’s our story now:

<<It was a bitter autumn day where an assortment of bright colored hues of leaves were scattered all over and jumped out adding a splash of color. I was riding through the neighborhood, which I had known all my life, on my sleek, black super speed bike. My chocolate colored hair whipped into my eyes and stung, as I passed a bunch of houses with my nosy neighbors out front, raking leaves, slowly while their eyes darted around. While admiring the autumn atmosphere I forgot about my brakes. I realized I was going very quickly. My gray eyes opened with anticipation as suddenly a great shadow, about the size of my dog, caught my eye.>>

Now we need to get some prompts on to warm up our writing. Here are a couple I made up:

* Jenna’s dog Charley keeps making trouble. Describe the messes the dog makes.
* Create some magical potions
* Create a restaurant menu
* Tanya and Melody have a fight, show what happens by dipping into each other’s thoughts and point of view.

How did those go? For more, visit the WRITE NOW page.

Well, our story’s finally over. It went from:

<<It was a cold autumn day. I was riding through the neighborhood on my bike. I was going very, very fast. Then I suddenly saw something.>>

To:

<<It was a bitter autumn day where an assortment of bright colored hues of leaves were scattered all over and jumped out adding a splash of color. I was riding through the neighborhood, which I had known all my life, on my sleek, black super speed bike. My chocolate colored hair whipped into my eyes and stung, as I passed a bunch of houses with my nosy neighbors out front, raking leaves, slowly while their eyes darted around. While admiring the autumn atmosphere I forgot about my brakes. I realized I was going very quickly. My gray eyes opened with anticipation as suddenly a great shadow, about the size of my dog, caught my eye.>>

How do you like it??!! Tell me in comments. Do you think I could improve it further? Well, that’s it for that. Remember, I’m on wattpad and pocket writer. I’m @iowareadsandwrites on both.

Stay tuned for more coming soon.

Writing Part 2. Going Into Detail

Our story so far is:

<<It was a bitter autumn day where an assortment of bright colored hues of leaves were scattered all over. I was riding through the neighborhood, which I had known all my life, on my sleek, black bike. My chocolate colored hair whipped into my eyes, as I passed a bunch of houses with my nosy neighbors out front, raking leaves. While admiring the autumn atmosphere I forgot about my brakes. I realized I was going very quickly. My gray eyes opened with anticipation as suddenly a great shadow caught my eye.>>

Our story is looking better, but it’s not very descriptive, so we are going to make it more detailed.

How bright were the leaves colors? Screaming bold, subdued back splash

How fast and sleek is the bike? Dashing speeder, mountain smooth

How did it feel having hair in your eyes? Stinging, slapping

How were they raking leaves? Slow and smooth or fast and jumpy

What did they shadow look like or remind you of? Bunny, ant, monster

Just remember to use details when writing so that people can almost feel what’s going on in the story.

Now this is our improved story:

<<It was a bitter autumn day where an assortment of bright colored hues of leaves were scattered all over and jumped out adding a splash of color. I was riding through the neighborhood, which I had known all my life, on my sleek, black super speed bike. My chocolate colored hair whipped into my eyes and stung, as I passed a bunch of houses with my nosy neighbors out front, raking leaves, slowly while their eyes darted around. While admiring the autumn atmosphere I forgot about my brakes. I realized I was going very quickly. My gray eyes opened with anticipation as suddenly a great shadow, about the size of my dog, caught my eye.>>

Writing Part 1. Spicing Up

Oh! Before we begin, I got a watt pad account (on watt pad you can write, read and share stories that you wrote, get on http://www.wattpad.com ) My wattpad is @iowareadsandwrites

This is our story so far:

<<It was a cold autumn day where different bright colored hues of leaves were scattered all over. I was riding through the neighborhood, which I had known all my life, on my bike. My chocolate colored hair whipped into my eyes, as I passed a bunch of houses with my nosy neighbors out front, raking leaves. While looking at the autumn atmosphere I forgot about my brakes. I realized I was going very fast. My gray eyes opened with anticipation as I suddenly saw something.>>

Now we need some interesting words to spice the story up. Here are a few:

cold, different, bike, looking, fast, saw, something

now let’s change them up. Cold can be… Bitter or chilly. Different could be unique or interesting. Bike?! What kind? Sleek, black bike. Looking becomes watching, staring… I could go on and on. Fast? It’s a terrible word. Swiftly, quick, high speed. Saw becomes watched, caught my eye…etc. And… Something. That one is hard, it depends on what circumstance. The something Gould be a monster… Or a flower… Or a little boy. It depends-

Now look at the writing:

<<It was a bitter autumn day where an assortment of bright colored hues of leaves were scattered all over. I was riding through the neighborhood, which I had known all my life, on my sleek, black bike. My chocolate colored hair whipped into my eyes, as I passed a bunch of houses with my nosy neighbors out front, raking leaves. While admiring the autumn atmosphere I forgot about my brakes. I realized I was going very quickly. My gray eyes opened with anticipation as suddenly a great shadow caught my eye.>>

Have suggestions? Comment. Have questions? Comment.

Characters

Alright. Back on topic! We changed a boring story into this:

<<It was a cold autumn day where different bright colored hues of leaves were scattered all over. I was riding through the neighborhood, which I had known all my life, on my bike. I passed a bunch of houses with my nosy neighbors out front, raking leaves. While looking at the autumn atmosphere I forgot about my brakes. I realized I was going very fast.Then I suddenly saw something.>>

Now, we are going to make it even better by giving some life to the character. First of all is it a girl or a boy? I’m going to go with girl. Now her personality. Is she a bully? Does she blend in perfectly? Does she make a statement? She pulled? She shy? She was loud? I could go on FOREVER! So, I’m going to come up with a pretty average girl. She has light brown hair, straight, down her back. With large gray eyes. Quiet, secluded and shy, this girl doesn’t have much friends. How about her grandmother broke her back while riding a bike so this girl has a fear of fast going bicycles. Past happenings can change a characters attitude.

Now let me show you the story:

<<It was a cold autumn day where different bright colored hues of leaves were scattered all over. I was riding through the neighborhood, which I had known all my life, on my bike. My chocolate colored hair whipped into my eyes, as I passed a bunch of houses with my nosy neighbors out front, raking leaves. While looking at the autumn atmosphere I forgot about my brakes. I realized I was going very fast. My gray eyes opened with anticipation as I suddenly saw something.>>

Give me a comment. Tell me how I’m doing.

Setting

All right! I’m back!

<<It was a cold autumn day. I was riding through the neighborhood on my bike. I was going very, very fast. Then I suddenly saw something.>>

This writing needs work. Let’s start with SETTING.

Setting- They are in a neighborhood. Good so far, but what type of neighborhood is it? Is it the kind with nosy and sneaky neighbors? The one with the neighbors who give you brownies? Or the plain old mean and grumpy neighbors? We’ll go for the nosy and sneaky neighbors because maybe that was the reason why this character was going fast on his/her bike. And this choice changes the feeling in the story. It wakes the mood a little mysterious and cold.

Since we know it’s autumn, we can say golden leaves cover the ground. We aren’t going to get into detail of sensory and details of words (we’ll do that another time).

Did this character live in this neighborhood their whole life? Did they just move? I’m going to go with the “lived here all my life duh” idea. So they might say “I remember where the most leaves gathered under a tree”.

So now the writing looks like this:

<<It was a cold autumn day where different bright colored hues of leaves were scattered all over. I was riding through the neighborhood, which I had known all my life, on my bike. I passed a bunch of houses with my nosy neighbors out front, raking leaves. While looking at the autumn atmosphere I forgot about my brakes. I realized I was going very fast.Then I suddenly saw something.>>

Want to add something? Comment below!

Building your way up

Tell me how this sounds:

<<It was a cold autumn day. I was riding  through the neighborhood on my bike. I was going very, very fast. Then I suddenly saw something.>>

Give me a rating. 1 for horrible, 10 for awesome. Post a comment down there, be honest tell me.

If I were to rate this, I’d give it a -100. That’s right negative one-hundred. It’s terrible. It’s gruesome. It’s shallow. It’s… To bad for words. It’s what a kindergartner would write (don’t get me wrong, kindergarteners have their way of writing😢)

What was the problem? The WORDS! Words are what make up your writing (may it be poetry, a novel or a picture book, etc.) You can’t abuse the words. Once you do, your piece of writing tumbles down. You see, writing is a pyramid (for you history lovers) or a high-technology sky scraper (for you modern writers). Your base: the idea. Your inspiration, your “aha” moment. Then comes the first story: the usual. Character, setting, plot…etc. Without that, your story wouldn’t make any sense, like driving through a dead end street. No use… Next comes: WRITING! Well, what are you waiting for. Just write. Your writing may be great… Or terrible (not to be rude, just being honest). That’s why you need one thing even before the idea (base), you need foundation. The founder, the land you build on (any of those things). Before getting your inspiration, you have to be able to write well. Practice. Try prompts. Get writing. Poetry. A chapter. Something!

So- using

<<It was a cold autumn day. I was riding through the neighborhood on my bike. I was going very, very fast. Then I suddenly saw something.>>

I’m going to make you, one post at a time, a better writer. We’re going to build a story (pyramid/skyscraper… Get it!πŸ˜‰)

Interview Is Up

Yay! The interview is recieved and I will post it here.😝

When you write a book, who do you imagine reading it?     I write for children–so I have those youngreaders in mind when I’m writing a story.

How do you come up with writing ideas?     A lot of my writing ideas come from my own
childhood–but also from our children and
grandchildren…newspaper articles…nature…
almost any experience can trigger an idea.

How do you get inspiration?     Music, nature, my family and a good book.

Do you think hard to get an idea, or does it flow to you?     Sometimes ideas flow. Sometimes I struggle.

Who reads your stories before going to a publisher?     My husband is also an author. We share our writing with each other before sending work to a publisher.

Who is YOUR favorite author?     My husband, Jerry Spinelli, is my favorite
author.

Where is your best writing atmosphere?     I like writing in my office. It’s cozy and familiar.

What is your favorite writing genre?     My favorite is poetry.
When did you start writing?     I started writing stories and poems at age 6.

From the stories you wrote, which are your top 5 favorites?     I hesitate to say “favorites”…but here are five that seem timely to me right now:

NORA’S ARK–because we recently had a
lot of rain.
COLD SNAP–because it’s also been cold and
snowy.
SOMEBODY LOVES YOU MR. HATCH…
because it’s almost Valentine’s Day.
WHERE I LIVE…because we are moving soon.
GOD’S AMAZING WORLD …because it’s one of my latest.

Abd that’s it for the interview! Thank you Eileen Spinelli! Please comment or write a little here! πŸ˜ƒ

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